On the floor, I stand
motionless
soaking in the rhythm
absorbing the beats
feeling the music from within.
My hips are the first to move
to the rhythmic muse
pulsing through my body.
My legs are next
steps that match
the sway to my hips.
My back and shoulders respond
with a lift and a twist.
Following suit, my arms
stay in flow with the tempo.
My body a canvas of music
dancing across the floor
movements of unison
steps of beat
a slow shake of the hip
a shoulder curls
as an arm carves the
rhythms in the air.
My body a canvas of music
the music my muse
dancing across life’s stage.
I wake up
sadly realizing
it was all a dream.
9/10 (rewrite)
~I was a dancer and now I dream of dancing. I can still dance with my upper body with no problem but that is not the case for the lower half. I have a right leg and hip that are week and have some balance difficulties all from the progression of Multiple Sclerosis. One of my goals is to dance like I used to again. It can be done with patience, time, and hard work. :)
A video of me reading A Canvas of Music. :)I finally figured out how to read them without extra.
A new video 12/5/10
please inform me if the video does not work :)
* For One Shot Wednesday at
One Stop Poetry week 13
*photos from goggle images
33 comments:
Struggled to play the video, froze on me after 15sec. I'll come back to it. Great poem, tough ending, but it's yours.
I hope you will dance again - so happy you dance in your dreams, and in these words on the screen, you dance, for certain. Well done!
Strong, thematically-compact dance imagery builds ably to a heart-pounding sad crash. Effective, solid work.
A vibrant and evocative piece. Nicely done.
my bosy is a canvas of movement..nice. i could feel the beat in the movement of your body through the piece...great one shot!
I know in part what that feels like . I am a singer and there was a period of time I could not sing. The sound moves through your bloodstream as I know the fluidity does.
What a beautiful poem - I hope that you are free to dance with all of your heart very soon.
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
Moon hugs
Wonderful...and if it can be envisioned, it can be realized. The video of you reading your poem is so interesting--I wonder how it was done. At first I couldn't tell that that it was you in the upper left hand corner, but then I could see you quite clearly...and you are lovely.
"My body a canvas of music..." -- what a brilliant description of dance.
Lyrical and beautiful poem.
Dear River,
Loved the poem, the reading...
From pain and loss, you have risen like a phoenix.
I look forward to your poem, and one day - your dance.
Great reading for a wonderful poem. Agree with the previous comments, "my body is a canvas" is an incredible line, through which you combine many arts in your poem. cheers
Thank you for your wonderful comments. When I was dancing (outside my living room) people would say I made the music visual. I was thinking of those words and where the body is in the equation when "my body is a canvas" popped in my head. It made so much sense with dance and in my life. Thank you again everyone! :)
very beautiful words!! I have a friend who suffers from MS, my heart goes out to you!!
Poignantly beautifully!
the middles makes it
oh you must miss it a long - i can hear the longing in your words to dance - to carve rhythms in the air..hope you will be able to dance again
You dance with your voice and your words...beautiful.
I love dancing...and to be carried away with the music is like a trip to heaven...blessings...bkm
You'll dance again if that is your focus. It's certainly in your heart. nice One Shot!
You are already DANCING on the strings of my soul with this breathtaking piece! i felt the music, the rhythm and i felt your spinning around like a daring breeze..you WILL dance again, mark on my words..:)
Great reading of a beautiful poem. I hope you dance again soon. WOnderful meeting you through One Shot Wednesday!
What a beautiful touching personal poem.
great poem and hope you do dance like you say you did , and great oneshot
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Thank You for all your wonderful comments. :)
Dear River
Its so beautiful and I liked reading your thought, your pain and your desire to have the abundance of joy that comes from dancing.. I love to dance to and I can relate with you quite well..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
Twitter: @VerseEveryDay Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
I once dreamt that I was pregnant, and I was so happy and making all of my plans. I felt so fulfilled, so right. Then I woke up and realized I had only been dreaming and i was terribly sad for a while, as if I had lost that child I dreamt I carried. And yet, I am still so glad I had that dream.
Keep dancing, River, how ever you have to do it. :-)
what a gorgeous painting you made through your words.
trisha
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heartfelt words.
Your love for dance is beautifully expressed in your poem.The video is very interesting with your reflection reading your poem.good work
Your spirit dances, River. And your words. Beautiful.
Came here again River via Monday poetry potluck... and enjoyed it reading again...
Have a look at my new one submission for the same...
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/08/whispers-some-haikus-and-some-of-me.html
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
Your poem is just unreal and listening to your voice, made it even more special. I love this now blog, so classy and special...and hope you can dance again soon my dearest friend xxx
it is so very beautiful, River :) thanks for sharing!
My Potluck Poem
I saw that I had commented on this before but this means so much more now that I know a bit more about you. Yes, nothing can stop your spirit. MS is such a cruel disease. I'm a nurse and have worked with it over the years. There has been some progress, but not enough. All the neuro disorders are so confounding. Beautiful poetry from a beautiful spirit.
damn! i mean, DAMN! i listened to the recording (managed to do that after patiently waiting for the entire file to load, then pressed on play - suggestion for other future readers), and not only that this poem was alive when i first read it (yeah, first) but i felt as if suddenly i was pointed towards a new dimension...i simply SAW it. all. and felt it. deeply. this is excellent and vivid and painful...
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